Category: Writers Block
Ocean butterfly
7-29-09
This is where I dance
among the waves and the stars which crash together
swirling in a torrent of white angry foam
that curls around your nose and sprays into your mouth
until every last breath is gone and all that's left
is the pounding of your blood.
This is what I sing to you
a song of late hot summer nights
lost out on the beach
stranded far from sleep while the ceiling fan turns
and my daydreams churn
and my right foot itches but I don't care
because you're just there
sleeping on the floor.
And here is what I write for you
a tarnished mirror full of gleeful secrets
that stare you in the face
but still you look away
because mirrors aren't always nice
and they never tell a lie
they just languish in deception.
The moon is growing heavy
the night is getting cold
and the ocean waves are fading and
I can't recall the gold.
Was there once a butterfly
living in my heart?
Was there once May sunshine
at summer's gentle start?
Come back to me crisp autom
and bring with you your scent.
And let us walk the woods we knew
before our freedom ends.
Let me be a fairy
and let him be my king
and let my voice not die in fear
so I may yet still sing.
For there's fire in my eyes
and there's ice around my chest
and I need his hands to keep me safe
from all that lies in wait.
So this is what I give you
this terror and this shame
this winter rose so far from home
that's never had a name.
For I tread with careful steps my dear
my hands pressed to my face
because if I look into the glass
I'll shatter straight away.
I am not a goddess
a fairy nor a queen.
I'm just a hunted ghost crab
who's searching for the sea.
Your mind should be in the museum of fine art.
Hugs,
Thom
This is written well, good use of image and rhymes. Gives me a bit of a sad, lost feeling.
I agree, your use of imagery gives the read a sense of loss. I love the simplicity of it, like the line about your foot itching, simplicity that is used in a higher meaning. I love it. Very good work.
I like the way you merge fantasy with reality. This piece is so complex I'll have to give it a few more reads to grasp all that went in to its creation. You should be proud. This is brilliant!
This is a deep piece. I really like it. As other posters have replied, the imagery in this is wonderful. I had to read it a couple times to grasp the meaning of the poem.
aww girl love it